http://just-shai.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] just-shai.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] notevery 2006-11-22 08:41 pm (UTC)

Uh, damn.

I've enjoyed this, a lot. I've one or two nits which may not even make an impression on other people. But I find that the repetition of something said on the show, such as the word "cosy" and forgetting where she was, they rather jar the scene. It doesn't seem to flow right to me.

Other than that, very well done.

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