Do you know how rare it is that I read porn that I wish I'd written?
This is sublime. This has the hallmarks of a perfect pwp. The premise is straight-forward, the staging short and effective, the writing luscious. The anticipation builds deliciously, their voices are spot on-- and all of a sudden it's *incredibly* hot, first with the phonesex and Ianto starting to lose it, ratcheting up the intensity; then Ianto sinking to his knees in front of Jack and his *desire*, the strength of it, you can taste it, feel it like an ache; and then the pay-off, bringing all the threads together; and then the aftermath, swift and sweet, just enough to leave the reader with a smile.
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Date: 2008-02-24 01:55 am (UTC)Do you know how rare it is that I read porn that I wish I'd written?
This is sublime. This has the hallmarks of a perfect pwp. The premise is straight-forward, the staging short and effective, the writing luscious. The anticipation builds deliciously, their voices are spot on-- and all of a sudden it's *incredibly* hot, first with the phonesex and Ianto starting to lose it, ratcheting up the intensity; then Ianto sinking to his knees in front of Jack and his *desire*, the strength of it, you can taste it, feel it like an ache; and then the pay-off, bringing all the threads together; and then the aftermath, swift and sweet, just enough to leave the reader with a smile.
And all in, what, four thousand words? Five?
I bow to you. *g*